Gumboots
“Emily
wait!” I cried running after my little sister. She was running towards the
awful lake I had nearly drowned in. Trees rushed past us, and soon I saw the
glassy surface of the lake. I knew that she wouldn’t stop until I tagged her.
She continued running away from me. Suddenly I saw her trip, and I ran even
faster. The gravel crunched beneath my feet and I reached the spot where I saw
her fall, she wasn’t there. I searched for her, but I couldn’t find her. Then I
looked towards the lake and saw her gumboots in it.
By
Georgia Barrand
(Team 100WC)
ReplyDeleteHi Georgia, I really like how you hooked the reader in from the start by using speech and urgency. I can see that you've included some powerful description and have used a mix of sentence types to make your writing interesting to read. Well done :-)