Friday, 8 November 2013

100 WC
Everyone was asleep but me I went downstairs out the door and bam I got knocked out. When I woke up I wasn’t me I was a ghost and their were other ghosts no spirits around me all going to the lake and suddenly I was going to the lake. I crawled at the ground but the force kept tugging at me and it wouldn’t stop so I just let it take me to away. My face went under and my whole body went under until just my gumboots were visible. Ahhhh I woke with a startle. I was where I got knocked out.

By Anthony Bennett
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  1. Anonymous10 November 2013 at 00:48

    Anthony, you have used some great verbs in your writing. I especially like crawled and tugging. These, with adverbs, adjectives, similes and metaphors, all help the reader to create an image as they read. I would love to have read a description of the ghosts.
    I was pleased that your story brought me back to a safe place as a reader and I loved your super imaginative ideas.
    Keep on reading and keep up the super writing.
    Mrs Neale (Team 100WC)

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