100WC
The trees were swaying and my heart was thudding. “What was happening?” The wind was picking up it was a storm! The violent storm was uprooting trees, was there any shelter left would I be next? I ran to find a safe place to rest but the storm was too close. It blew me over and five tree branches fell on me, it is too much I cant breathe. ”AHHHHHHH” I feel like I am going to die. “Where am I?” I wondered. It felt like a car, oh my god it’s an ambulance.
By Mia Lowe (Year 5)
Oh my! That was terrifying! I like how you have described the storm and used questions to tell the reader what your character was thinking Mia. Just make sure that you use a full stop at the end of a sentence and not a comma. It makes it easier for the reader to understand. Apart from that, it's a great 100WC. Well done.
ReplyDeleteMrs McGuiness (Team 100WC)